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**Twisted Fairy Tales**
You should have finished your second draft of your tale. Now it is time to peer edit the stories by the other members of your table group. You will do your editing using the rubric handed out to you and the sample below. Make sure to type your work on the DISCUSSION tab. DO NOT EDIT THE PAGE!

SAMPLE:

__**Mr. Sickles' Peer Editing for Mr. Tabbara**__ //Assignment// //Structure and Style// 6. 3-I can see all the parts of a good story. 7. 1-You seem to use a lot of rice cake words, when more descriptive words would paint a better picture of your story. //Presentation// 8. 1-You have several spelling errors, as well as errors with subject-verb agreement. 9. 3-Your story is just over two pages! :) 10. 3-You did a nice job with aligning and spacing your paragraphs.
 * 1) 3-Nice choice in fairy tales. I love the Little Mermaid!
 * 2) 2-The point of view seems to change a few times from first person to third person.
 * 3) 3-The Big Squid Man is quite original!
 * 4) 2-Most of the story seems to be very similar to the original story.
 * 5) 1-It seems like the creativity ended with the change of the main character.

SCORE: 23/30

//Things you did well:// Your story seemed to get off to a great start, with the setting being slightly different than the original story. You also organized your ideas well into paragraphs.

//Opportunities for growth//: One thing I believe would spice up your story is going back and using more adjectives and adverbs, as well as more precise verbs. For example, you wrote the squid swam away from the shark. Try a word like scooted that shows that he was in a hurry. Also, you might try to change a little more of the plot. For example, the friend of the squid could be a crazy turtle, instead of a fish (like in the original).

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